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I officially feel silly now. Spelling and me, well, I need to be better friends with the spellcheck, you're absoiutely right.

I"m not sure how precisely I managed to convince myself opossum was 'possum'.

Thanks for the review!

-Voxina

Vox, how much do you care about this story? From reading it, I get the impression you don't care very much about it; there's a lot of spelling errors that could've been easily caught by either proof-reading once or by using a spell-checker. If you want people to review your work, then you need to make sure you've at least cleaned up the easy stuff. Otherwise, they're left with the impression that the author doesn't care. And if the author doesn't care, then why should the reviewer care?

Now unfortunately I haven't read the rest of the novel so I can't say anything about character development or stuff like that. But I can say that the dialogue is generally good. It comes off a bit stilted in the beginning, but the middle of the piece reads pretty well.

What you need to work on are descriptions. Take this for example:

She sighed, turning onto her side. Her stiff wings twinged as she used her abdominal muscles to execute the roll, sucking in a breath. Outside the shuttered windows, a rooster crowed, and a neighbor’s mullar lowed.